Monday, 1 March 2010

Magpie Tales 3 (A kilo weight being the picture prompt)



Her big eyes stared out from her pinched white face and pain showed in the creases of her brow. The sheets were taut against her chest and the green coverlet that matched the five others in the ward had slipped to one side.


‘Don’t touch my leg,’ she groaned. I looked at her leg with the large evil looking apparatus attached to it, stretched out from under the half cover, and swallowed when I saw the pulleys and weights that hung off the wire attachments.

‘My broken fibula was out of place so it needs to be stretched back into position,’ she said.

I felt sick just looking at it and sat down in the chair beside the bed.

‘So you didn’t get to France, I think your hubby said you were on the local dry practice run, preparing for your skiing holiday?’ I replied.

Tears glistened in the corners of her eyes as she sobbed. ‘Oh no I didn’t do this on the slopes, I fell over that bloody thing I bought on Saturday as a doorstop and went flying, without skis I might add, down the back steps into our kitchen.‘

We looked at each other and without another word being said, her sobs turned to laughter and before I knew it I had joined in. Then her laughter turned to moans as her shaking body moved her leg and the weights hanging off the contraption swung. I smiled sympathetically and looked at her face as she winced in pain.

And to think I had been envious of her find in the junk shop, thinking how it would polish up and match the colour of my grey stained floor boards, as obviously Jen had done. ‘What a find,’ she had said, when she had turned towards me showing me the kilo weight, ‘isn’t it great, so, so kitsch?’

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17 comments:

  1. Ah, one man's treasure is another man's.......WAIT!!!

    Another gem from you!

    Rick

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  2. Captures a simple exchange without any pretence. I was wincing. Nice.

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  3. Nice creativity for such a hard subject!!
    :) THe Bach

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  4. lol. love the tale...once, she might have been envious, but...great magpie!

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  5. a great new look to the prompt!
    the conversation seems to flow easily...
    and you become absorbed in the moment!

    http://adivashammer.com/archives/26

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  6. I almost did a similar story. I am a retired RN and immediately thought of fractured femurs. Good story. Nice writing.
    QMM

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  7. Very graphic, I can feel her pain..ouch!

    Interesting read and take on the M-#3

    Joanny

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  8. Love it, so well done. Superb story, excellent take on the photo prompt!

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  9. Is it the love of things that prompts us to fall all over them? Weights are doppelgangers; on the one hand we love how they are suppose to balance of all things material; they seem just in their unemotionality. Yet, the other hand they wreck emotional havoc when we trip over them. Which goes to prove the old adage; "weigh not waste not".

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  10. I love the way you've mirrored the weights in this piece. Super job!

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  11. It was a sneaky load, a sneaky weight, with an attitude...

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  12. As Willow said -- I was struck by the echo of weights on the hospital bed. Nice job!

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  13. Short and sweet - great writing!

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  14. Like Willow and Vicki, I too was struck by the way you used weights in the story. Nicely done.

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  16. The pain turning to laughter and back to pain again is very real.Did you ever end up in hospital with a broken fibula?

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  17. No Peter I have never broken a bone, but I was a nurse 50 odd years ago and that was the treatment then.. I checked and poor people with broken bones suffer a similar plight!
    Hope I am not tempting fate!! erum

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