Friday, 21 May 2010

Magpie Tales#15


The charm bracelet lay broken beside the pool of blood. ‘Strange the murderer didn’t take it, ‘ said Rizzlo, ‘Looks as though it could be worth a bit.’ He looked down at the face now drained of blood and the open eyes that stared up into the sky. Mitch shivered as she leaned over to look at the bracelet.

‘Another young girl killed before she had lived.’ She thought. The early morning noises from the city street was all around them, but the girl lying in her own blood heard nothing.

‘Get the morgue van here double quick before the heat of sun gets to her, at 30°C she is going to smell.’ He said into his phone and then to Mitch, ‘bag that bracelet so the ME can examine it.’

In the clear bag, Mitch looked at the bracelet, the little silver fishes shone and shaking them they jangled. Was the bracelet a present ? A Twenty First birthday present? A Congrats for passing your Exams? A Driving Test? An Anniversary? What tales could they tell.? And they, with their shiny, beady little eyes..... had they seen the perpetrator, the murderer, would they reveal who had done it?
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16 comments:

  1. If Only. . .fish could talk...what a tale you tell Christine. A sad tale well written and told.

    Joanny

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  2. A haunting tale, brilliantly written and you have woven such fascinating ideas into your writing. I truly enjoyed reading this.

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  3. Oh, very spooky ~ and well written!

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  4. I so hope they could tell, but I'm afraid... Nicely done.

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  5. What a great story..well done

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  6. Powerful tone of sadness and regret.

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  7. left us with needing and wanting to know more. Darn it!

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  8. Well executed story. The charms as witnesses is brilliant!

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  9. Those beady little eyes saw all. Great tale!!

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  10. Now is the time for the guys from NCIS to come in a solve the mystery!

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  11. oh, great mystery...did they see...if only they could tell. nice magpie!

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  12. Perhaps some DNA on their silvery scales will tell what their eyes did see.....?

    Nice piece.

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  13. Quite a witness you have there..now, who dunnit? The fishies know!!

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  14. Christine,
    Of course, a charm bracelet; why didn't I think of that?
    So you have the art of the hook down pat: well done I must say. Now, are you working on the finish or will you leave the story untold.....for now?
    Personnaly I think the charm giver should be suspect number one. Just saying.
    Well done lady!
    rel

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  15. Intriguing - what's the rest of the story???

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  16. Very good, Christine! Your story gave me the chills.

    www.angiemuresan.com

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