Monday, 12 April 2010
Lipstick. Magpie #9
Ben took the creased and now rather grubby envelope from his pocket and once again kissed the faint lipstick mark then pushed it back behind his body armour. The thought of Lily kept him going and that last letter had outlined her plans for their wedding when he got home. Home was green hills and quiet villages; there would be spring flowers there now. She had written that she wanted spring flowers for her bouquet and garlands of bright daffodils at the little village church.
He was part of a patrol in Helmand province, the task was to keep the Taliban out of the village of Kushal Kalay, so that another group could go in and clear the area of the Taliban's Improvised Explosive Devices or IEDs. Only one more he thought, this was to be his last tour. Suddenly they were under fire and his attention was back with his men. They had attracted quite a lot of attention from the insurgents when they moved into position, but the fact that they were concentrating their attacks on the patrol and not the engineers means that the plan was working - even if it was a bit hectic at times. For 72 hours they had remained in position and repulsed numerous insurgent attacks. The LAV (Light armoured vehicles) had inched towards their position following that first lonely man with a mine detector checking out the road. The hazards of the IEDs were so great that even when they were fired on, they still had to stick to the path and couldn’t run for cover. Ben thought of the carnage caused by deadly roadside explosives, the suicide bombers, and the constant threat of attack and hit the sandy bank when a ripping sound of a volley of bullets whipped up the sand on the ridge of the bank. Last week his own best friend had died along with 3 other soldiers in a fierce battle; they got you all ways if it wasn’t a bullet, it could be deadly IEDs that could be anywhere.
On the return journey, the patrol was contacted again and again by insurgent fire and on another two occasions, from a variety of weapons including mortars, Rocket Propelled Grenades (RPGs) and small arms. But they arrived safely back in the late hours of March 7th. Ben was relieved that this time no casualties were sustained during the course of the patrol. After one week and over 200km, the patrol returned to Camp Bastion, they had been out in the hills for just under a week.
Ben kissed the lipstick stained envelope one more time as he pushed in down into his backpack, he would be home in twenty-four hours, home and Lily. He had tried her mobile several times and listened to her voice as she said, ‘Please leave me a message.’ No doubt, he thought she was busy and anyway she would not be expecting him to phone then, as he had told her their mission could take up to nine days. He stood on the tarmac and looked for the last time at the hills of Afghanistan, he was safe and on his way home and to Lily.
There was just a single daffodil on the coffin in the small village church on that second day of March, it being much too early in the year to have the garlands that Lily had planned for her April wedding. There were the sounds of sobbing from Lily’s mother and friends as the coffin was carried down the aisle that Lily had planned to be decorated for her wedding. The lorry hadn’t seen Lily’s small car that had stopped for the horses, as it rounded the bend in the country lane and the police that had attended the accident said the girl driver didn’t have a chance to survive such a crash.
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ReplyDeleteSuch a tragic love story - heart wrenching. Nice use of the photo prompt, well done! Excellent descriptive writing, evokes great imagery.
ReplyDeleteGod Bless the soldiers. 9/11 - Never Forget.
"Be convinced that to be happy means to be free and that to be free means to be brave. Therefore do not take lightly the perils of war."
--Thucydides--
Christine,
ReplyDeletethe unexpected twist is always good.
The lip stamped envelope reminded me of my days in Vietnam; so very real!
Excellant detail in a well told story.
rel
A powerful twist of fate, Christine, sad and all too real....
ReplyDeleteRick
and that, my friend, is irony! Poignant, tearful, can feel the regret still heavy on my chest....
ReplyDeleteBecause I am the POSTER CHILD for adult ADHD, I was easily distracted by all of the military jargon..how in hades do you know all of this? I was amazed at that knowledge alone.
bravo!
Tragic, tearful , very descriptive post, excellent take on the Magpie.
ReplyDeleteJoanny
Such a contrast Christine, from war to love and hope. A tragic ending. Nobody wins here. Strange how a tube of lipstick represents so much love hope and pain in people's responses to this Magpie prompt.
ReplyDeleteA well crafted story with a sad twist at the end. You held my interest throughout, despite the military language, which is foreign to me.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Star
I, too, was amazed at the breadth of your knowledge of the military. It makes me think you may have been there yourself. Terrific story with a surprising ending. Very well done, Christine.
ReplyDeleteWhat a heart breaker!
ReplyDeleteI like your writing and suspected a twist..but where? and it came upon me and I still don't know it happened....but I saw it before you wrote it...Which means you made me a participant....wonderful
ReplyDeleteI too was impressed by your military knowledge
but it didn't get in the way
I think the use of the military language really leads us where you want us to go - thinking that in the end, it was him who was killed. Very cleverly written tale and a totally unexpected ending. There's a moral in there too.
ReplyDeletecompletely unexpected ending - a very touching story
ReplyDeleteExcellent story with much detailed description of life in Afghanistan. Definitely "you got me" with the surprise ending. I was thinking how sad for Lily, and was wondering how you were going to describe the "repatriation ceremony and then this brilliant twist! Funny how we assume certain progressive events will happen in a certain way. I guess that's what it is really like over there; expect the unexpected. Why dont the powers that be" use more sniffer dogs, etc? LED's are sort of low tech; why so difficult a problem to solve? Perhaps strategically placed webcans? I dont know, something should be done, and soon before any more troops get killed. Can't wait til we win this one. God bless all troops in Afghanistan! Thinking of the GI's over there mostly all the time! Praying for all safety and return soon, please!
ReplyDeletepowerful,
ReplyDeleteyou have my respect.
Have a winsome Wednesday!
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/13/because-she-is-plain-magpie-tale/
ReplyDeletemy first magpie,
thank you in advance for looking at it.
Oh no no no. So heartbreaking. I am really moved by your beautifully crafted story. Thank you.
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